One of the major issues facing the world today is overpopulation. What problems arise from this situation? What measures can be taken to deal with this?

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Nowadays, overpopulation is one of the biggest
problem
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in many
countries
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what can be done to solve it. There are two main drawbacks related to the increase in population. One of these is that there is not enough
food
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to support the current amount of people around the world. It is well known that
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food
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production
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in many
countries
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does not have
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to increase.
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, we already have states in Brazil where the
food
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supply does not support the demand.
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,
energy
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is
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a huge problem when talking about overpopulation. The world is short in supply of fossil
energy
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,
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Europe
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passing through an energetic crisis since the beginning of the century.
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, there are some possible solutions for those statements. Agriculture is facing a new era of technology, and the efficiency of
food
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production
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is growing fast.
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, we already have available technology to duplicate de
production
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of cereal farms.
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, green
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has been an option for those
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that do not have other energetic alternatives.
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, wind and solar
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are becoming very popular in
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like India, where the population is growing fast, and they do not have traditional options
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energy
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supply. In conclusion, the lack of
food
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and
energy
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are the main downsides of increasing in population.
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, we already have
technology
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to help
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farmers enhance their
production
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, and
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green
energy
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is becoming an alternative in many
countries
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