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ome individuals take stopping the completion of studies for a year between high school and a bachelor’s degree while others believe that taking experience without academics is more important

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These days the significance of education , which was always debatable , has now become more contentious,some individuals take stopping the completion of studies for a year between high school and a bachelor’s degree
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 others believe that taking experience without academics is more important.
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 trend's significant influence has sparked debate about its potential impact in recent years. In my opinion , the former proposition is more logical .
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 essay will elaborate on my arguments for favouring the positive impact of
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 trend, leading to a logical conclusion.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and supporting sentences that logically flow from one to the next.
coherence cohesion
Include a clear thesis statement in the introduction and a summary of the main points in the conclusion.
task achievement
Provide more specific and detailed examples to support your points.
task achievement
Ensure that your ideas are fully developed and demonstrate a clear understanding of the topic.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary and use more varied and sophisticated language.
grammatical range
Pay attention to your grammatical accuracy and range. Avoid repetitive structures and errors.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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