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the charts below give information about levels of education in glasgow in 2010

the charts below give information about levels of education in glasgow in 2010
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The charts compare the study
levels
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 in Glasgow in the year 2010 by age range and by gender.
Overall
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, most of the people aged 16 to 75
years
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 old graduated from
university
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,
while
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 the majority population aged more than 75
years
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 did not have any degree.
Furthermore
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, the proportion of
education
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levels
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 between women and men was almost the same where the highest proportion of the two genders did not have any qualification, and the smallest percentage had
university
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 degrees. Younger communities in the city had higher discipline
levels
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 than older society. There were about three-quarters of people aged 16 to 50
years
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 old graduated from the highest level of
education
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, despite less than one-tenth of the population did not have any degree.
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 the highest percentage of society aged 50 to 75
years
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 old had degrees from
university
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, 30% of the population over the same age did not have any qualification of
education
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 and the others had school certificates.
In addition
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, 72% of the oldest generation did not have any experience in any educational institution. There was an insignificant difference between the proportion of
education
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levels
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 between the two genders in
this
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 area in 2010. The rate of men and women who had no qualification in
education
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 was 38% and 35%.
Moreover
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, 33% of males and females in Glasgow had school certificates,
whereas
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 the lowest segment of the chart was
university
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 degrees.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words levels, years, university, education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Levels of education
  • Glasgow
  • 2010
  • Charts
  • Data
  • Information
  • Overview
  • Education levels
  • Males
  • Females
  • Comparing
  • Trends
  • Patterns
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