Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have negative impacts on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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youngster and their ability to build personal relationships. In my opinion, social
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can have more positive impacts than the negative impacts On one hand, young people who have
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level of digital literacy can be easily fooled and be a cyber
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target in social
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, there are several cases of cyber
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that lead the
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cyber
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victims especially online sexual assault because of their
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while
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use
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social
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. The perpetrators use their social
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persona to impress the
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and
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trap them
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agenda. Not only can be the victim
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youngster
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also
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can be a perpetrator when using social
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. There are a lot of viral bullying
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caused by the
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happened because of their lack skill of digital
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understanding.
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, social
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usages
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can improve the
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youth
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knowledge and
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by
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positive connections.
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, the youngsters can build online communities to study together on Twitter and Facebook when they have similar
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to study.
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, when they prepare for
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campus entrance exam, they will share the test examples and discuss
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them together
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in that online community
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.
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, the wide range of social
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increase
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the possibility of the
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to contact and learn something from the professional. There are a lot of educational influencers in social
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that can be followed
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youth
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bringing good impact for them. Even though there are several advantages and disadvantages of
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social
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young people, I believe social
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bring
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more
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positive impact
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them especially when they use it under
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parents
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monitoring.
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