most people decided to have children in their later age than in the past. why? do the advantages of this outweigh its disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples,e.g from your knowledge or experience
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later
age, so they Add an article
a later
decided
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decide
children
at
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this
case, there are few
reasons Correct article usage
a few
are
working behind Unnecessary verb
apply
this
changing societal norms and priorities.
Career and financial stability is the main Correct determiner usage
these
reason
of
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for
this
changing norms. Correct determiner usage
these
Now-a-days
, it is very tough to get a job, because Correct the word
Nowadays
one
student needs to pass different steps of educational
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the educational
systems
. Later, they need to have work experience to get a good job with a good salary. Salary or financial stability stands in Fix the agreement mistake
system
their
way of Change the word
the
marriage
life
. In our society, especially male
, if they are not well established with Fix the agreement mistake
males
good
salary and Add an article
a good
financially
support, it is very tough for them to marry someone. So, getting established takes time, Change the word
financial
for
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and for
this
reason
, one
married couple have children
in
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at
later
age.
Another Correct article usage
a later
reason
is choosing career path,
and emotional and psychological readiness in Remove the comma
apply
one
person. Someone choose
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chooses
career
path Correct article usage
a career
than
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rather than
marriage
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a marriage
life
. one
earns higher degrees of
educational certificates later they get married. Correct your spelling
or
On the other hand
, if they earn higher degrees of
certificates Correct your spelling
or
then
they are looking someone
who will match their choice. Change preposition
for someone
This
is the
another Remove the article
apply
reason
which is now prevailing
trend in our society.
The advantage of having Correct article usage
a prevailing
children
of later age is than
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that
one
can get enough time to settle themselves so that in future to support ones children
would be easier for them. Some early marriage
in not well-established family and having children
,
is sometimes very challenging in Remove the comma
apply
this
decade. And later it causes mental challenges for parents.On the other hand
, disadvantages
of late Correct article usage
the disadvantages
children
is
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are
also
not good for some couple, because uncontrolled uses
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use
birth
control pills, Change preposition
of birth
intake
not Correct word choice
and intake
well defined
food diet Add a hyphen
well-defined
also
responsible for Add a missing verb
is also
this
problem.
In conclusion, it is must to say that, marriage
is an important part of one
's life
, it was easy in early ages but in this
decade it seems getting tough. So I would tell
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say
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that changing
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in
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patterns
pattern
could make Fix the agreement mistake
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