most people decided to have children in their later age than in the past. why? do the advantages of this outweigh its disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples,e.g from your knowledge or experience

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changing societal norms and priorities. Career and financial stability is the main
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changing norms.
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, it is very tough to get a job, because
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student needs to pass different steps of
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systems
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. Later, they need to have work experience to get a good job with a good salary. Salary or financial stability stands in
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life
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. In our society, especially
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, if they are not well established with
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salary and
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support, it is very tough for them to marry someone. So, getting established takes time,
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later
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age. Another
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is choosing career path
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and emotional and psychological readiness in
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person. Someone
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career
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path
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marriage
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life
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.
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earns higher degrees
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educational certificates later they get married.
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who will match their choice.
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another
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which is now
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trend in our society. The advantage of having
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of later age is
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one
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can get enough time to settle themselves so that in future to support ones
children
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would be easier for them. Some early
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in not well-established family and having
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,
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is sometimes very challenging in
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decade. And later it causes mental challenges for parents.
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of late
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is
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also
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not good for some couple, because uncontrolled
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birth
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control pills,
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not
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food diet
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also
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responsible for
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problem. In conclusion, it is must to say that,
marriage
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is an important part of
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's
life
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, it was easy in early ages but in
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decade it seems getting tough. So I would
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,
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in
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societal
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patterns
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pattern
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could make
easier
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apply
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our
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life
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for getting married.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • societal norms
  • priorities
  • career
  • financial stability
  • medical technology
  • life expectancy
  • emotional readiness
  • psychological readiness
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
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