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Research shows that business meetings, discussions and training are happening online nowadays. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Currently with fast evolving technology, an increasing number of firms are holding
meetings
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 or training sessions online. In my opinion, that has more benefits than downsides.
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, holding online
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 and discussions
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 of traditional face-to-face format might be affected by many different factors
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 as internet or device issues.
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, when an unstable internet connection causes a conference to be interrupted, participants are unable to
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monitor the meeting
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 work progress.
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, online
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 are typically more comfortable than regular
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 since attendees can choose their own workspace and do other personal things, which may prevent them from completely concentrating on the conference.
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, people may attend a discussion
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 eating, surfing the web or cleaning the house, which can impair their capacity to grasp and remember all the necessary content.
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,
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 to these disadvantages, putting the advancements in information technology to work has numerous other advantages. Nowadays, most applications for organizing online
meetings
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 include the ability to record and save
meetings
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, so that if the internet connection is unstable leads the meeting is interrupted or lost midway through, attendees can review recordings that have been saved in their device's memory.
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 allows people to watch the conference’s progress and completely recall essential information.
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, when businesses conduct online training, their employees will feel more at ease, as there will less pressure than in traditional training because they may freely choose their
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 workspace and simply join
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 from anywhere are.
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 will allow people to better organize their time and work, reducing stress and increasing productivity. In conclusion,
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 arranging online
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, conversations and training for businesses today may have certain downsides, I believe it has many more positives.
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