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Governments should prioritize national interest over global cooperation to maintain their sovereign status. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Every
country
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 has their own law regarding national
interest
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 among international cooperation to protect its sovereign
status
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. Personally, I agree that governments ought to prioritize their
interest
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 globally to save their sovereignty.
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 will explore in the following essay.
Initially
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, the sovereign countries have their own reglement to follow over global cooperation and that includes the authority over the
country
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.
Therefore
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,in a sovereign
status
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, they have full control over themselves and to keep it safe they need to put a tough low on the territory.
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, Saudi Arabia is a sovereign
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 they have an entire control of their society and their national and international projects. Despite
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, there are a number of significant benefits of sovereign
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 because it has the right to modify and put its government under its power,
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,
this
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 kind of
country
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 can prioritize its interests
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 as the education system with unique terms and conditions without any friction from other countries.
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, many sovereign authorities have their private law radically and have an independent government.
Nevertheless
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, Qatar, the UK, Spain, etc. can change anything in their
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such
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 as the yearly planning for the health system or financial system
To Conclude
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, it is frequently said having a sovereign
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 is a power for the
country
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 because it
give
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the
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priority to its
interest
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,
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Moreover
,
that
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which
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 allows the government to prioritize their objective and keep the whole authorities under
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its
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 control tremendously. I strongly believe that supports my point of view.
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