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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical apliances and amount of time spent doing in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarises the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical apliances and amount of time spent doing in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarises the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The given line graphs provide data on the proportion of families who had three different electrical appliances and how much of their time was allocated to housework per
week
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 over an interval of 99 years in one country.
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, the percentage of families with electrical appliances has an increasing trend.
Also
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, a remarkable reduction could be witnessed in the
hours
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 that were spent doing housework.
According to
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 the first line graph, in 1920, only 2% of families had
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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,
while
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 the percentage of households who had washing
machine
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machines
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 and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 stood at 40% and 30%, respectively. The figure for the use of
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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 experienced a significant growth until 1980 and reached 100%.
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,
this
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 percentage remained unchanged until 2019. Regarding utilizing a vacuum cleaner, a tripling could be seen until 1980 to 90% and
then
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 rose slightly to 100% in 2019. The use of washing
machine
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machines
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 had a moderate growth and reached 70% in 1960 and
then
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 remained unchanged until 2019. As the second line graph shows, the decrease in housework
hours
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 per
week
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 happened from 1920 to 2019. At the initial period, it comprised 50
hours
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 per
week
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 per household. It plummeted to 20
hours
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 per
week
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 in 1960 and decreased slightly in the 20 subsequent years.
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, there has been a steady decline in recent years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words week, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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