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e table and charts detailed below give information about the police budget in 2017 and 2018 in on area of Britain. The table illustrates where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

e table and charts detailed below give information about the police budget in 2017 and 2018 in on area of Britain. The table illustrates where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The table chart represents information about the income sources of police
officer
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in
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 2017 to 2018,
while
 the pie chart shows
about
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the
paying
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 of police
officer
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officers
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 between 2017 and 2018.
Overall
, it can be seen that the most budget came from National Government, and the most
spenting
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spending
 was salaries. To
being
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 with, the total
of
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income in 2018 was higher than
2017
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. National Government accounted for 175.5 and 177.8 in 2017 and 2018 respectively. Followed by local taxes at 91.2 and the
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percentage
was increasing
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 in 2018
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 102.3. In 2017 and 2018, there was spending money for salaries about 70 per cent, and in 2018 was less than
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 about 7%. Technology
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increased from 2017 to 2018
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 8% to 14 per cent. For 2017 as building and transport as 2018.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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