An overseas friend wants to visit your country on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter Recommend the best time of year to visit and why Describe the types of accommodation your friend could choose Say what you would like to show your friend in your country

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your studies? I am pleased to hear that you are planning in my country. Since I received your email I was so jubilant that we will meet after a long time. I know you have been planning vacations for 2 years in Australia.

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, the weather condition is cold throughout the year in Toronto and you miss summertime.

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, the summer season

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next month in Pakistan and I think

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time to enjoy summer days. There are various options for accommodation in my town and you can choose anyone. A new building was built

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year so you can choose a flat for rent because it's near to my home.

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, there is a local hotel in the town and it's eminent in my area.

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hotel provides facilities for physical activities and a playful area for your kids. A mini cinema was opened by the Hotel recently and it is a good initiative for people to entertain. I recommend you to visit the Northern side of Pakistan because it's not only an amazing place but

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you feel serene. Whenever you have time you must visit

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area. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Warm wishes,

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 5.0

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