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The maps below shows changes in the city of Nelson in recent times . Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparison where necessary.

The maps below shows changes in the city of Nelson in recent times . Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparison where necessary.
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The map
present
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presents
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 the difference in Nelson
city
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City
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 in the
last
 two decades.
Overall
, the transportation has changed over the years. Many markets and shops opened recently in different areas of the
city
. Since the population increased the hall of residences opened near the university. In 2000, the
citizen
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citizens
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 of Nelson had only
way
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one way
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 of transportation which was by cars.
However
, today many ways of transportation can be used,
such
 as trains and bikes. there was a train station in 2000, but there
was
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were
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 no
trainlines
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train lines
trainings
 inside the
city
, Unlike today, there is a line from the
city
centre
 to the university. Both
accommodation
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the accommodation
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 and shopping
industry
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industries
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 increased and many
building
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buildings
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built
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were built
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 in the
city
.
Firstly
, there
is
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are
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 many shopping areas in the
city
 now. One shopping
centre
 near the university and shops around the
city
centre
,
also
 in the port area you can find
resturant
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restaurants
restaurant
 and bars. That was not the case in 2000,
where
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when
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 it was only one shop near the
city
centre
.
Secondly
, accommodation is not an issue now since the hall of residence
built
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was built
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 to provide
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a save
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save
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safe
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 place for
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a citizen
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citizen
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citizens
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 to stay in.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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