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e table and charts detailed below give information about the police budget in 2017 and 2018 in on area of Britain. The table illustrates where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

e table and charts detailed below give information about the police budget in 2017 and 2018 in on area of Britain. The table illustrates where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The pie chart below depicts the expenditure of
police
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budget
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 divided into various parts in percentages and the table illustrates the legitimate sources of
the
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apply
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capital in millions of
euros
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 for the same, in the
years
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 2017 and 2018.
Overall
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, the money generated for the police
budget
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 remained nearly similar for both the
years
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 and the major chunk was provided by the national government.
The most
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 of the collection was spent on giving salaries of the officers and staff throughout and the least was concentrated on
technology
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the technology
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 department. In 2017, the national government sourced 175.5
million
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euros
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 for the police
budget
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 which marginally rose to 177.8
million
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euros
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 for the next year. The capital generated through
collection
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the collection
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 of the local taxes clocked 91.2
million
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euros
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 followed by
a
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an
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 exponential rise in the next
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years
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year's
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budget
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 by 11.1
million
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euros
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. Money accumulated by
the
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apply
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means of other sources
were
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was
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 nearly similar for both of the
years
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 around 38
million
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euros
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. 75 per
cent
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 of the cash was spent on paying off the salaries
to
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of
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 the officers and staff
in
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at
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 the beginning of the time zone which experienced a slight downfall to 69 per
cent
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 by the end. The capital invested
on
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in
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 technology inclined considerably from 8 to 14 per
cent
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 towards the completion of the timeline. About 17 per
cent
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 of the money was put into the technology department in both the
years
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.
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