In many cities, the population is encouraged to use public transportation rather than private transport In your opinion, what are the advantages and disadvantages of using public transport?

Nowadays
people
are increasing transportation day by day either public or private
moreover
, some
people
believe that using
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in
metropolitian
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metropolitan
city not only
offer
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offers
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some
fritful
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fruitful
frightful
benefits but
also
offer
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offers
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worst impact
in
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on
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the
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people
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lives. In
this
essay,
as
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per my
perspective
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perspective,
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mass transit
have
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has
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huge pros
than
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and
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cons and
i
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will describe
in
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them in
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upcoming paragraphs. On the one hand , community
health
can be improved by the public traffic,
currently
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masses have been vulnerable
as a result
they prefer to go outside by
bus
or train because they can stand
approximately
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for approximately
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30 minutes to reduce
the
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obesity and other
health
problems without any delay their work.
For example
, when
people
set off to the
bus
station where they require to stand
almost
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for almost
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half an hour
due to
this
they walk
comtinuously
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continuously
so they can improve not only their
health
but
also
any hazards disease can be stopped by
this
condition.
Moreover
, air pollution may be reduced if folks prefer their public
transports
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transport
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such
as
,
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ferris
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ferries
,
subways
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and subways
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.
On the other hand
,
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can
cause
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easily if
crowd
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situation
occur
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in
the
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public places.
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with, when
public
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start a sightseeing journey
so
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in
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which
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distinct type of
people
who
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have some ill condition owing to
this
,
infection
can spread easily by touch contact.
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, In 2020,
covid
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the
virus was spreading by contact with
the
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other
person
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people
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or by sneezing so
that
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the
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goverment
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government
had
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stopped
the
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trains and
bus
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buses
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because
infection
can spread
in
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all over the
word
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world
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.
In addition
,
some times
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sometimes
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the women feel insecure because of less security in
the
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apply
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public transport
hence
,
this
sitauation
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situation
might face
any
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abuse
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condition
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conditions
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on
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in
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the environment.
To sum up
, even though
metro
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the metro
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gives
a
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an
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ample amount of benefits
such
as mitigating pollution from the country,
reducing
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and reducing
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health
problems,
nonetheless
, it has some serious side
effect
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effects
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for the masses like
insecurity
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the insecurity
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of
female
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females
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in the
bus
despite that
causing
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it causes
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infection
to the person.
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