The table below shows information and predictions regarding the charge in percentage of the population age 65 and obove in three countries.
The table displays data and forecast information on the percentage of population difference among people aged 65 and above in
Canada
,Germany and UK
from 1988 to 2000.Correct article usage
the UK
Overall
,it is evident from the chart that there was an upward trend in all nations.
To begin
with,In 1988,Canada
was at 16% while
Germany was at 20%,In a similar pattern, they both rose slightly with
about 5% to 21% and 25% respectively.Change preposition
from
However
,Correct article usage
the Uk
Uk
stood at 14% Correct your spelling
UK
initially
and increases
just by 1% to 15% in 2000 being the least in 2000.
Wrong verb form
increased
Furthermore
,the number of people living in all countries were
predicted to increase steadily by 2030 and Correct subject-verb agreement
was
Canada
was at 26% hitting the top of the table,while
UK
had the least amongst other countries,but Germany was at 25% being the second country with the highest population after Correct article usage
the UK
Canada
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