e table and charts detailed below give information about the police budget in 2017 and 2018 in on area of Britain. The table illustrates where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
The table and chart
presents
details about police Change the verb form
present
financial
in 2017 and 2018 in one particular area in Britain.The table shows the sources of Replace the word
finances
money
that police get from and the charts illustrates
the percentage of Correct subject-verb agreement
illustrate
money
spent in
Change preposition
on
salaries
, technology and buildings and transport in both years.
Overall
, national
government was the highest source of Add an article
the national
money
. However
, the money
that came from local taxes increased significantly. The most money
was spent on salaries
. Nevertheless
, the proportion of technology grew which led to Correct article usage
a decreased
decreased
in the percentage of Change the form of the verb
decrease
salaries
.
In 2017, national
government was the highest with 175.5 million and local taxes and other sources with 91.2m and 38m respectively. In 2018, the national government remained the highest with 177.8m. Add an article
the national
However
, the most significant increase was in the local taxes with almost 10 million.
In both 2017 and 2018 the
Correct article usage
apply
salaries
was
Change the verb form
were
in
the top of the Change preposition
at
spendings
with 75% and 69% respectively. Fix the agreement mistake
spending
Nonetheless
, the technology was 8% in 2017 which then
increased to be
14% in 2018. Unnecessary verb
apply
Therefore
, the salaries
percentage decreased and the buildings and transport remain
the same Wrong verb form
remained
with
17% in both years.Change preposition
at
Submitted by ibrakh80 on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words money, salaries with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
▼
Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+
Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!