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Education should be free to all people and should be paid for and managed by the government. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#education #people #government
Some individuals are of the opinion that
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the
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governmental agencies should make an investment
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for
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 the education of the present youth, as they can get access to studies free of cost. I strongly agree
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 notion, and in the upcoming paragraphs, I will give detailed information. There are many advantages of an expenditure on studying a child by public institutions.
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, it assists in educating the whole community, whether rich or poor. Because the
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, it brings equality by teaching all
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humankind.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • socioeconomic background
  • meritocracy
  • social equity
  • highly-skilled workforce
  • economic growth
  • financial strain
  • budget allocation
  • overcrowded classrooms
  • educational materials
  • specialized fields
  • tuition costs
  • oversaturation
  • degree holders
  • job opportunities
  • graduate unemployment
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