In many societies, there is a growing emphasis on individualism, with people prioritizing their personal goals and desires over collective interests. Is this is a positive or negative development?
Over the
last
few decades, in some states, millions of human beings have preferred the choice of individualism to accomplish their desires in life. Linking Words
Although
it has several pros like personal growth, and being goal-orientated, the negatives outweigh the positives Linking Words
due to
several possible reasons Linking Words
such
as social isolation, neglecting the needs of society and less helping nature. Linking Words
However
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this
essay describes both developments before framing the conclusion.
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To begin
with, some accounts that individuality is not only beneficial for staying focused on the aims but Linking Words
also
for personal growth. To explain Linking Words
further
, a person would be more punctual, disciplined and hardworking owing to fewer disturbances in life namely late-night parties. The majority of successful people, Linking Words
for example
, love to sit alone Linking Words
while
working on their goals to maintain their focus. Linking Words
Furthermore
, self-dependent Linking Words
as well as
self-confidence can be the other reasons for choosing Linking Words
this
kind of trend which means they became strong enough to make their own decisions like career, and marriage related.
On the opposite side, a few folks think that it has more demerits as compared to merits. Linking Words
Firstly
, a growing number of the public wants to live alone which can lead to self-isolation. Linking Words
In addition
, these kinds of decisions Linking Words
causes
several issues namely depression, and stress. 60% of students, to illustrate, are suffering from social isolation which ultimately becomes the reason for mental illnesses. Change the verb form
cause
Moreover
, after using these techniques, a number of peopleLinking Words
neglecting
the needs of others which means they don't prefer to help or support anyone because of committed to their own achievements.
In conclusion, there has been a big debate about whether individualism has better outcomes or not. Wrong verb form
neglect
Although
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,
it is helpful to achieve goals in life Remove the comma
apply
such
as personal improvement and desires fulfilment it has more negative consequences as Linking Words
this
can lead to social isolation and lack of help from other members of society.Linking Words
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