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Many people believe that the increasing number of cars in cities is immense ‎pollution and waste. Others think that industries are the ones causing ‎pollution. Discuss both views, and give your opinion.‎

#people #cars #cities #‎pollution #waste #industries #ones
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people
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number
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the
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car
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cars
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 in
hometown
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their hometown
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 is immense pollution and waste and others think that factories are one of the most cause
emission
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emissions
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 into the
environment
.
This
 essay will
dicuss
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discuss
 both views.
Firstly
,
Car
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Cars
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 contribute to traffic congestion on over the world.
Although
 it
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convinient
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convenient
with
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people
 to
transportation
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but
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the
number
 of harmful gases
emit
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emitted
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 into the
environment
 is too much.
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indeed
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" rush hour" students and workers are
very
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 large cause
to
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 traffic jams and the amount of toxic gasses
had
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releases
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in
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 the air
also
cause
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to
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global warming. Industries emit harmful gases and pollutants
curently
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currently
 more and more
serious
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. Many plants are establishing higher than in the past, it's not controlled
number
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the number
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 of toxic gases
into
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in
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 the
atmospheres
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atmosphere
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 and the
number
 of
emission
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emissions
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 increasing more and more.
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,
curently
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currently
 other factories
are face
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 with pollution in the world and China is one of the most
country
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countries
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 emit pollution into the
environment
 in the world
than
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and they have
not
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no
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 method to
dealing
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 with
this
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these
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problems
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. In my opinion, both of them
are
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also
effect
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affect
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 to
environment
 . We should plant more and more trees to demand O2
to
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people
 and
it's prevent
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human
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humans
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 when
wheather
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weather
whether
 alternated bad.
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Inconclusion
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, both
of
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issues are congestion
into
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people
 living and reduced gas
emit
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emitted
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 into
environment
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the environment
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 is
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successful
successfull
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successful
 for
people
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  • renewable energy
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  • industrial waste
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