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Many people who care for the elderly do not have enough time to look after them. What are the problems related to this? What are some possible solutions?

#people #care #time
In recent times, plenty of people have
lack of
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time
 for themselves because of elderly
care
 in their family.
This
 problem is serious, but some solutions might be helpful.
This
 essay will discuss the
problems
 related to elderly aged
care
 and some possible
explanation
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. In
variety
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families
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of families
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the
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elderly
care
is
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becoming
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a
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 issue
recently
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. The most presentable is the fact of not
enough
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having enough
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time
 for their
individual’s
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 caring. They can
also
 follow the elder almost 24/7,
plan
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 for their other activities is usually reduced. There are many troubles if they are not to
care
 about the
elder
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 for a few minutes, so it is extremely hard for them to take
care
their
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 own. As an example, nowadays children go to school half of the day, their parents need to go to work and who can look after the elderly members.
This
 causes
problems
 when other obligations are required.
Although
 the elderly
care
time
 is a problem, there are some solutions and solve it. The other household members need to require aged responsibility home facilities, these things should be equipped in their houses, where they can live in peace. The second way is we can hire caregivers to follow them all
the
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day, so we do not need to worry about them as much, they can support old people and help them with their daily-basis activities. The
last
 one is that they can go to
retirement
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home
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homes
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that
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where
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 many old people are there and they can
also
 bond with each other and do a lot of
exercises
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with
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. In conclusion,
problems
 related to elderly
care
 like lack of
time
 for other activities are serious
problems
 in modern
city
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • burnout
  • neglect
  • emotional distress
  • social interaction
  • mental stimulation
  • financial costs
  • community care services
  • respite care
  • telehealth services
  • flexible work arrangements
  • caregiver leave policies
  • support networks
  • emotional support
  • monitoring systems
  • training programs
  • interpersonal strain
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