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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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There are the number of individuals who states that, teachers should not provide
homework
 to children studying in schools, because
this
 may have the negative impact.
On the other hand
, several parents say that in the life of academic children,
homework
 plays a significant role. The latter statement can be right because it will help students
as well as
 their parents to focus on lessons taught in their recent classes and
this
also
 helps in teaching discipline.
However
,
this
 may affect their leisure
time
activities
 and causes several health problems.
according to
 my opinon, both statements are right, discussed with some relevnt examples. To commence with, homeworks help students to revise what have been taught in their classrooms
as well as
this
 help parents to understand what course is currently their children are studying. Homeworks help scholars to have a good discipline and punctuality regarding their studies.
For instance
: studies have been made by some researchers,
according to
 them young people who completes their assignment are more punctual
then
 the girls and boys who do not perform their home
activities
.
Therefore
,
homework
 plays a significant aim in one's life.
In contrast
 to
this
,
homework
 may have some disadvantages, major one is the loss of their interest in extra curricular
activities
 and reduces their play
time
. Juveniles with no extra curricular
activities
 will have no creativity,
as well as
 no physical exercises in the form of sports may lead to many disorders,
such
 as obesity, diabetes, hypertension, depression, sleeplessness, etc.
For example
: beginners have been seen with these kind of disorders if they are not performing some physical actiivties. To recapitulate,
homework
 is an important part of schoolchilds' life. Somehow, tutors should limit the amount of homeworks. Less home
activities
 will help them to manage their
time
 for some extra curricular
activities
as well as
 their sports
time
.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the introduction clearly presents the topic and states your opinion.
coherence cohesion
Develop each supporting point with more specific examples and explanations.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to enhance your essay.
grammatical range
Pay closer attention to sentence structure and grammar to improve clarity and accuracy.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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