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More and more information about the lives of celebrities is found in newspapers, magazines, online. What is happening? what are disadventages for reading public ? provide reasons for your answer include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Nowdays
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, the
newss
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news
 of
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celebrities
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celebrities'
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 lifestyles is being established in
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media
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the media
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 print and
media
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 online.
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i
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 personally feel that
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celebrities
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celebrities'
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 habits are drawback
highest
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such
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 as a high
of
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sosial
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social
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life style
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lifestyle
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 and a lack of education.
Celebrities
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 who
has
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high
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of
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sosial
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social
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life style
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lifestyle
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 are being
expensived
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expensive
 status.
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sosial
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social
media
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their
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 are being branded things
such
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 as type of cars and bags.
In
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 instance, Indonesian artist
is
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Rahfi Ahmad should
has
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 been
showed
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showing
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 brands things like Addidas and Nike
for
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as
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 role models.
Thus
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,
spend
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much of
money
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 should
has
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 been collected money by
celebrities
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.
On another
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paramounts
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paramount
about
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 the impacts
of
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on
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 individuals is
lack
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the lack
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 of education are being lacked
of
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knowledge.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, for young people is fastly for getting information
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that are
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are
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is
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 being accessed by
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media
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the media
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.
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thoses
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those
 much be
influeced
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influenced
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self branding
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 knowledge.
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, the students
has
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have
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spended
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spent
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 time
to watched
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watching
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 vlog of
celebrities
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in indonesia
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indonesia
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Indonesia
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 daily
life
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 on
youtube
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YouTube
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 channel. In conclusion, the are
severals
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several
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 drawbacks
for
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found in
sosial
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social
media
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 by
celebrities
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.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, daily
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life style
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lifestyle
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 and lack of
educatio
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education
 are being
liabelited
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labelled
 for people.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that all paragraphs have a clear topic sentence and supporting details that logically follow.
coherence cohesion
Include an introduction that states your opinion and provides a brief overview of the main points to be discussed. Also, remember to give a concluding paragraph that summarizes your main arguments.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to express your ideas more effectively. Additionally, pay attention to word choice and ensure that it is appropriate and accurate.
grammatical range
Work on improving the accuracy of your grammar. Pay attention to verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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