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The charge below shows the results of a survey but people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and Reporting the main features and make comparisons were relevant.

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The chart illustrates the percentage of residents in 5 Australian
cities
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 (
Sydney
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,
Melborn
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Melbourne
,
Brisbane
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,
Adelaide
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, and
Hobart
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) who purchased
coffee
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 and tea and their drinking habits that resulted in a survey. The data is categorized into three groups ( buying fresh
coffee
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, buying instant
coffee
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, and visiting cafés) in the
last
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 four weeks.
Overall
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, the most popular activity among all
cities
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 is going to a café for
coffee
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 or tea,
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 purchasing fresh
coffee
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 was the least one.
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,
Hobart
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 and
Melborn
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Melbourne
 showed the highest engagement in café
visit
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visits
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,
whereas
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Adelaide
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 had the lowest percentage for
this
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 activity. It is worth noting that
coffee
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 purchases were more than fresh
coffee
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 purchases in all
cities
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. It is observed that the proportion of people who went to a café in the
last
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 4 weeks is the highest in Melbourne and
Hobart
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 at just over 60%. During the same period,
Sydney
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 and
Brisbane
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 both were at 60% and 55%, respectively.
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, the figure for
Adelaide
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 was at just under 50%. In regards to the chart, the percentage of people who bought instant
coffee
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,
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Brisbane
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in Brisbane
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 and
Hobart
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 had the highest rates, at just under 55% of residents.
Adelaide
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 and Melbourne were at around 50%,
while
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Sydney
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 has the lowest figure, just under 45%.
In contrast
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, buying fresh
coffee
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 was the least common habit in all 5
cities
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.
Sydney
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 and Melbourne were dominant in
this
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 category at just under 45%.
Hobart
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 followed at around 40%,
while
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Brisbane
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 and
Adelaide
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 had the lowest figures, both under 35%.
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Be mindful of using more varied vocabulary to enhance the description and comparisons.
coherence cohesion
Consider adding a concluding sentence to summarize the findings distinctly.
task achievement
The essay clearly identifies the key trends highlighted in the chart, like the popularity of visiting cafés and the details about the differences between cities.
coherence cohesion
The structure follows a logical progression from an overview to detailed comparisons.

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