More and more information about the lives of celebrities is found in newspaper, magazines, online. What is happening? what are disadvantages for reading public? Provide reasons for your anwer include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.
Nowadays, information about lives
style
of Correct your spelling
lifestyles
superstar
is being fasted Fix the agreement mistake
superstars
access
via Wrong verb form
accessed
media
social and media
print. Overall
, this
essay will proved
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statement
about the drawbacks of Correct article usage
a statement
social
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the social
lifestyle
of celebrities such
as a high lifestyle
and a lack of education.
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luminary is being peaked social status. Change preposition
of being
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, status social of
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apply
their
is Correct pronoun usage
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with
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to
exclusive
, which Replace the word
exclusivity
the
impacts Correct article usage
apply
for
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apply
people
follow
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to follow
the
role Correct article usage
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models
. In addition
, background
of Add an article
the background
a background
economic
is determined Replace the word
economics
the
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by the
patten
of shopping style. Correct your spelling
pattern
Furthermore
, income
of household Add an article
the income
an income
different
had been needed of human dissimilar. Replace the word
differences
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instance, the one's Change preposition
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of
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famous
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apply
celebrities
, Rafi Ahmad has been Fix the agreement mistake
celebrity
successing
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a successful
models
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model
of
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for
that
Individuals Correct word choice
and
specially
young Replace the word
especially
people
is attending wear and buy that
brands. Correct determiner usage
those
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, economic
background of humans Correct article usage
the economic
had been impacting
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has impacted
for
capacity shopping Correct article usage
the for
lifestyle
and lifestyle
base
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based
from
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on
the
role Correct article usage
apply
models
.
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hand, the information of superstar daily Correct quantifier usage
other
lifestyle
is lacked
of education building knowledge. Wrong verb form
lacking
Moreover
, the information command related
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is related
with
daily activities, so Change preposition
to
if
will benefit for house wife or Correct your spelling
it
as
job Correct your spelling
a
relate
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related
with
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to
household
. Correct article usage
the household
Nevertheless
, for young people
particularly is being habited consumptive and less productive. For example
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always spends all night Add an article
the student
a student
for
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apply
wactching
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watching
roles
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role
in
their Youtube channels. Change preposition
on
Accordingly
, habits
of Correct article usage
the habits
people
for their models
had been impacting for
their Change preposition
apply
lifestyle
and learning.
In conclusion, there are several drawbacks is being famous and Individuals will access their live
faster from social Replace the word
lives
media
and print media
. However
, the impacts of those is
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are
lacking
of awareness and high Wrong verb form
a lack
of
lifestyles.Change preposition
apply
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task response
The essay does not fully address the prompt. It focuses on the drawbacks of celebrities' social lifestyle but does not explain why more information is being found in newspapers, magazines, and online.
coherence cohesion
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