Since the beginning of the 20th century, the number of endangered species ‎has increased significantly and we have witnessed more mass extinctions in ‎this period than in any other period of time.State some reasons for this and ‎provide possible solutions.‎

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Nowadays, it is clearly seen that the large number of

species

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exticting

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increasing

compared to the prior period.

This

is because of many reasons.

Firstly

, carbon emission leads to

the

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air

polution

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pollution

which badly affects

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species

and

its

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fertility,

as a result

, its number

are tend

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be declined

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Recent

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survey, clearly

demonstartes

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demonstrates

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that the most

poluted

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polluted

areas in Asia become

uninhebitable

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uninhabitable

for

species

those

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lived there

last

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centure

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century

. In order to mitigate

this

issue, society should reduce

green house

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greenhouse

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gas

emission

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by renovating

manufacruring

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manufacturing

processes.

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, many

species

are subject

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illigal

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illegal

hunting. The

discovery

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TV-program

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introduce the documentary film "Extinct

animals

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in Kenia" that the

tigers

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population is at risk of extinction

due to

the rapid growth of the tourism industry which mainly

focus

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hanting

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hunting

haunting

entertainment. It would be a good solution to establish the law and the government department which should control hunting in the country.

Moreover

, the government should control

population

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the population

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of extinct

species

via

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creating

database

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which contains the key parameters of animals like age, health

and

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etc.

Finaly

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Finally

, the government should establish

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Code of Ethics which could

restict

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restrict

people from illegal actions like hunting. In summary,

decrease

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population animals adversely

affect

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our planet. Certainly, society should make

the

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complex action plan aiming to prevent

further

increase

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mass extinction of

species

This

requires commitment not only

the

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from the

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governments but

also

ordinary

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people.

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