Deforestation has been an increasing problem over the last few decades. What are the primary causes of deforestation? How can we solve the problem?
It has been widely recognized that there
is
an increasing number of deforestation in the Wrong verb form
has been
last
decades. I believe that industrial expansion is the root cause of the problem and we need to regulate them to minimize the consequences.
The problem that needs to be considered is that plant-based industries that emerge in many countries, that are rich with rainforest
, are demanding more space to increase their production. That happens because the demand for foods, beverages and other plant-based goods Fix the agreement mistake
rainforests
are
growing since the population in many new metropolitan cities Correct subject-verb agreement
is
are
multiplying. Correct subject-verb agreement
is
For
example
the request for palm oil in JakartaAdd a comma
example,
,
has risen ten times Remove the comma
apply
since
2010 to 2020 as the changing diets of 1 million people Change preposition
from
that
is
now Change the verb form
are
emphasis
more on Replace the word
emphasise
the
fried foods. Correct article usage
apply
As a consequence
, the manufacturer has to expand their agricultural land so they can grow more crops and fulfill
the demands.
Change the spelling
fulfil
The
possible solution to Correct article usage
A
this
subject is the new regulation that actively puts constraints for
goods to be requested. With Change preposition
on
this
formal step, we can control the industrial expansion by limiting the amount of the consumer. Furthermore
, society have
to adapt by incorporating new creative ways of consumption. Change the verb form
has
For example
, people can create new dishes following the availability of the raw material in the market such
as in the year 1980, Indonesia
, when rice became the main dish replacing potatoes and creating a lot of new food Change preposition
in Indonesia
such
as fried rice, yellow rice, etc. With this
move, manufacturers do not have to expand their factories unless the government considers otherwise
.
In conclusion, the issue of deforestation has been caused by uncoordinated
expansion of Correct article usage
the uncoordinated
plantation
for manufacture as a response to the high demand for plant-based goods. Fix the agreement mistake
plantations
This
can be turned down as the government can regulate the demand.Submitted by lekalexsteve on
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