With the growing population in cities more and more people live in a home with small or no outdoor areas. Is it positive or negative development?

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Currently, more and more

people

are moving toward big cities from villages,

as a

result

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population of urban areas growing very high,

due to

the limited amount of space, city residents have to live in small

aprtments

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apartments

with small or no backwards, the fact there are more and more high-rise building because of that. In my view, there is both

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a negetive

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negetive

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negative

and positive side to

this

, in the bellow I will discuss about it from my point of view. There are

couple

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of positive aspects to

this

Firstly

, building many

apartment

building

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buildings

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solves the population problem in big cities. It increases the chances of more and more

people

having a roof above their

head

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heads

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Secondly

, living in an

apartment

helps us to

noice

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notice

and

pollutions

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pollution

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. the health of the

people

who

lives

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live

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near

streets

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the streets

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will be badly affected by dust and

noices

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noise

notices

noises

also

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it is safer to live in

apartment

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an apartment

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because they have

decent

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a decent

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security system.

On the other hand

, those living in apartments will have to pay extra fees,

such

as security, cleaning, lift and parking fees.

this

will increase the cost of living for a lot of

people

in addition

, before doing any party one

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have

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ask permission from the

apartment

management. In conclusion, living in

apartment

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an apartment

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can be very costly.

However

, it has positive effects on other aspects of life.

Such

as a healthy secure lifestyle and privacy.

Therefore

, city life is not for everyone and

people

think about it very wisely before moving to big cities.

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With the growing population in cities more and more people live in a home with small or no outdoor areas. Is it positive or negative development?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Other believe it is important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives?

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“Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor.

In some countries children take up paid jobs during the summer vacation. Some people feel that this amounts to child labour. Others argue that summer jobs help children learn valuable lessons. Discuss both views and give your opinion.