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It has been believed that people reading for pleasure have developed better imagination and language skills than people who prefer to watch TV. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #pleasure #imagination #language #skills #tv
Reading has long been considered
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 superb tool to foster
individual’s
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 imaginative ability and linguistic competence. I completely agree with
this
 perspective and I am convinced that the benefits of reading far outweigh watching television. It is true that reading is the best way to nourish one’s mind and allows individuals to cultivate numerous
skills
.
Firstly
, people could never read a book without
imagination
, as it does not provide visual
assitance
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assistance
. It is always mesmerizing that books are capable of teleporting readers into their own imaginative world.
For instance
, the Harry Potter novels transported readers worldwide into an incredible magical realm, a world that could take on any form readers desired, before the movies came out which
solidfied
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solidified
solidifies
 people’s
imagination
 and interpretations.
Furthermore
, there’s no better way to improve our linguistic competence than
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 genuine foreign
language
 expression by reading books.
Thus
, it is undeniable that reading is an indispensable part of our lives that flourishes our
imagination
 and
language
skills
.
In contrast
,
while
 watching TV has occupied
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 vast amount of our leisure time, I contend that its positive impact is limited. Movies and dramas show exactly what the creator
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 to convey, which
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 us limited room for
imagination
, as we absorb whatever message
that is
 given through visual and sound input.
Although
 it is true that people consider watching TV programs and dramas a
convinent
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convenient
 method to improve foreign
language
 listening
skills
,
this
 practice is far less crucial than developing authentic foreign
language
 proficiency through reading literature. In conclusion, I personally believe that the enhancement of individuals'
imagination
 and
language
skills
 through reading surpasses the benefits of watching television.
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