The charts show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car

The charts show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car
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The first pie
charts
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chart
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give
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gives
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informatiom
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information
about the causes
that
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why
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many people
went
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go
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to
work
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by
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apply
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cycling.
While
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the second pie charts represent
about
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apply
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the causes why people travel by car.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the most
reasons
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common reasons
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of
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for
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cycling
was
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are
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health and
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work
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working
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out and
reduce
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reducing
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pollution.
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, faster was lower than others.
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,the highest of driving was comfort , but the lowest was safety. To
being
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with, travelling to office by bicycle, for physical and
work
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out as percentage as pollution accounted for 30 per
cent
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. Followed by car parking and price was at 15 per
cent
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and 13 per
cent
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respectively. Faster was only 12 per
cent
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. For the reasons that why someone
prefer
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prefers
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to
used
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use
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car went to
work
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, 40 per
cent
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was
comfor
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comfort
than cycling. Followed by
long
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a long
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way to company accounted for 21 per
cent
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. Faster as
proportion
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a proportion
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as
carry
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carrying
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things. The lowest was safer than cycling.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • commute
  • sustainable
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • carbon footprint
  • fuel expenses
  • parking availability
  • gridlock
  • mass transit
  • individual choice
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