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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
#minutes #books #men #women #burnaby #library #summarise #information #features #comparisons
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The graph describes how many men and women
reading
Wrong verb form
read
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 books at
burnaby
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Burnaby
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 public library from 2011 to 2014.The given statement
in
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is in
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 thousands.
To begin
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 with,in
this
Linking Words
graph
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graph,
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 the number of
reading
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readings
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 of men in 2011 started
on
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at
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 3000 and slightly above in 2012 now it was 4000
moreover
Linking Words
 it
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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dramatically increased in 2013
reached on
Wrong verb form
reaching
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 10000 and
it was
Verb problem
apply
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went up
on
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to
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 14000 in 2014.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, the number of
reading
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readings
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of
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for
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 women in 2011
it
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apply
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was higher
from
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than for
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 men
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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was 5000 and they
are increasing
Wrong verb form
increased
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till
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to
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 10000 in 2013 but they
were
Unnecessary verb
apply
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abruptly declined in 2014 now it was 7000 end of the period.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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