the table and chrats detailed below give information about the police budget in 2017 and 2018 in on area of Britain. The table illustrates where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed

the table and chrats detailed below give information about the police budget in 2017 and 2018 in on area of Britain. The table illustrates where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed
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The two graphs depict the proportion of police expenditure in Britain
a
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area between 2017 and 2018.
While
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the table provides the sources of money, the pie charts explain how it is distributed.
Overall
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, the majority of the income was from
national
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the national
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government in the
last
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two given periods, and it was used mostly for the salaries of the officers and staff. Looking at the table,
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reveals that 252.5m of money was spent on the national
novernment
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government
in 2017 and 2018. As opposed to other sources which only
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increased
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slightly at 38 to 38.5m in both years. It noticed that local taxes
spent
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at 91.2m and 102.3m during those years. Regarding the pie charts, it is almost a third of the money allocated for the officers and staff,
while
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for technology remind the fewest at about 8% and 14 % in both years. The spending
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buildings and
transfort
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transport
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were
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at the same number in those periods,
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at 17%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words m with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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