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Some people believe that studying online is less effective than studying face to face and that more funding should be allocated to improve the effectiveness of online study. To what extent do you agree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is no denying the fact that the importance of studying online in our lives.
While
 it is a commonly held belief that
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traditional classrooms are more effective than studying online, there is
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that studying online should be improved by the governments to ensure its success.
To begin
 with, discipline and time management play a crucial role in teaching online success.
In other words
, some educators used studying online just to delay their
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homework
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In addition
, parents and society should
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 in
this
 process to ensure its success.
For example
, Japan has transferred all
education
 systems to be online. Another point to consider,
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 governments should
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 in the educational systems to improve
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effectivness
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effectiveness
. It is
also
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 it easy for
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students to search
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 resources, get benefits of their leisure time , and improve their computer skills.
Moreover
, the
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Ministry
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 can establish
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 to show all the students in the classroom
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 and ensure
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their effective extant.
For instance
, if the countries spend funds
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 studying online, it may save
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 budget, and spend it on other sectors. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that studying online is a critical part
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 process and it can be enhanced.
Education
 culture changed after technology has engaged in it.
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