The line graph below shows the consumption of 4 kinds of meat in a European country from 1979 to 2004.
The graph illustrates how a European country ate 4 types of meat between 1979 and 2004. Generally, the weekly consumption of chicken rose over 25 years,
while
others were
declined. Units are measured in Unnecessary verb
apply
grams
per person
.
In 1979, chicken was eaten by
just under 150 Change preposition
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grams
per person
per week
, followed by slowly increase to just under 250 grams
per person
per week
by 2004.
In contrast
, beef
, lamb, and fish weekly consumption faced downward
trend from 1979 to 2004, Correct article usage
a downward
whit
the most significant decrease Correct your spelling
with
on
Change preposition
in
beef
. One person
in a Europe country consumed beef
by just above 200 grams
per week
in 1979, while
lamb and fish were eaten per week
by
150 Change preposition
at
grams
and about 50 grams
respectively. Moving forward to 2004, beef
was only consumed by
just above 100 Change preposition
apply
grams
per week
, which close
to lamb and fish with Add a missing verb
is close
weekly
consumption range between 50 and 100 Correct article usage
a weekly
grams
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