The line graph below shows the consumption of 4 kinds of meat in a European country from 1979 to 2004.

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The graph illustrates how a European country ate 4 types of meat between 1979 and 2004. Generally, the weekly consumption of chicken rose over 25 years,

while

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others

were

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declined. Units are measured in

grams

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per

person

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. In 1979, chicken was eaten

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apply

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just under 150

grams

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per

person

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per

week

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, followed by slowly increase to just under 250

grams

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per

person

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per

week

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by 2004.

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beef

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, lamb, and fish weekly consumption faced

downward

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a downward

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trend from 1979 to 2004,

whit

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with

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the most significant decrease

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beef

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. One

person

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in a Europe country consumed

beef

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by just above 200

grams

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per

week

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in 1979,

while

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lamb and fish were eaten per

week

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150

grams

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and about 50

grams

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respectively. Moving forward to 2004,

beef

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was only consumed

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apply

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just above 100

grams

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per

week

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, which

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is close

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to lamb and fish with

weekly

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a weekly

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consumption range between 50 and 100

grams

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words grams, person, week, beef with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

151 words

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