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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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There is an assortment of evidence that the tendency of
one
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year
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one-year
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 break after school graduation till applying to university enhances gradually. As far as for
students
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 it is essential to not hurry with choosing
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a profession
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, because deliberate and right decisions always lead to great
outcome
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. In
these
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the
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 paragraph below, there are some pros and cons that
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need to be discussed. There are some remarkable advantages to
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 trend.
First,
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graduated
students
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 after 10 to 11 years of hard studying, might
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 renovate their mind and brain, after
long term
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 study by spending valuable
time
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 on their needs. Because, sometimes
pupil
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pupils
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 are not assured
on
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of
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 selecting enjoyable
career
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careers
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 and
occupation
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occupations
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, for the reason that the
students
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 are not filled with enough
of
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apply
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consciousness, but filled with messy
of
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information.
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,
according to
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 the report
Kazakh
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of Kazakh
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 National University in 2022, many
second
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second-year
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year
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students
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 have substituted their first profession
to
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for
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the
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apply
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another, because they
chase
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 it
mistakely
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mistakenly
. When local
comissions
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commissions
 asked them why, most of them said that they didn't have
suifficient
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sufficient
time
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 to think and make
right
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the right
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 decision. Despite the fact that teenagers have all
year
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 round to recover from academic years, it is likely to break graduated
student's
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students'
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 discipline and
time
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 management.
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, as youngsters have plenty of
time
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 and they are free from school, where
time
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 management and schedules are very strictly composed, they can just spend their
time
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 on useless things.
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, smoking, playing
videogames
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video games
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 and other sedentary activities.
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, when you are out of discipline, it is complicated to come back to a normal life and restore
reputation
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your reputation
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.
To sum up
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, I agree that after finishing school, teens should have some
time
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 to realise their life purposes. We have to always remember that, the right decision always
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 smart strategy. As
coin
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a coin
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 has two sides, it
also
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 has disadvantages. By having
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year
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a year
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 off, they might eliminate their lifestyle regulation.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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