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The plans below show how the ground floor of a particular building has changed over time

#plans #show #ground #floor #time
This
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The
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 plans below
gives
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give
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 information and details about how the same floor of a particular building has changed over the years. It is clear from the graph that
had
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there are
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 a lot of
changed
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changes
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in
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on
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 that floor.
Accroding
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According
 to what is shown, plans first the ground floor became
office
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an office
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 in 1958 to 1984 after that there became
apartment
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apartments
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in
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from
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 1985 to 2000 after that there became flower shop
sice
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since
 2001 Till now.
In addition
, the kitchen was consistent over the years.
However
, the meeting room first years it was it after that they removed it and put
living
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a living
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 room
insted
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instead
 of
meeting
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the meeting
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 room
besides
, nowadays
it's change
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it's changed
it's changing
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 to gift cards.
Although
,
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apply
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 it was
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the manager
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manager
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manager's
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office
 in the past after they changed to
apartment
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an apartment
the apartment
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 that became bedroom1 after that when there was a flower
shops
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shop
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it's change
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it's changed
it's changing
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 to
office
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an office
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 in present.
To sum up
, we could say that First when there was
a
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an
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office
 exactly when you enter there in the lift you would
saw
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see
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small
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a small
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 toilet after that when there became
a
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an
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 apartment they changed to increase
a
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the
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 place and add
bathroom
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a bathroom
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 and shower
besides
, nowadays
it's change
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it's changed
it's changing
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 to play area and decrease the place.
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