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Many mesuems charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to mesuem outweigh the disadavantage.

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Nowadays, the majority of the historical buildings have been charging a fee for entrance,
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 many of those are free of cost. In my opinion, it is a boon for
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society to put a small portion of
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 entering the premises. In the upcoming paragraphs, I will delve into the reasons behind
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 viewpoint.
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 with, the museums are the places which store the rich heritage of culture from ancient times from all around the world. Because of that, it requires the high maintenance of
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 cultural things, definitely, the same amount of charges made to visitors is beneficial for the improvement of history.
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, 'Virasat-e-Khalsa' established in Anandpur Sahib consists of Sikh heritage, which
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 needed huge investment to maintain the same glory for a lifetime.
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, the fees charged for coming every time to view
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 institutes assist in the repairing of
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 buildings from time to time.
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, it plays a vital role in managing crowds at
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 places
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 the security measures.
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, if the fee would not have been raised for entering
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 unique places, admittedly it would make the area more crowded
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 the destruction of enriched history that was saved from ages.
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, to build a peaceful atmosphere inside the museum some amount of penny must be charged by the management. In a nutshell,
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 people argue about the fees charged
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 entering museums or an aquarium, it has been more advantageous not only for maintaining institutions but
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 for keeping a safe and secure environment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • generate revenue
  • maintenance
  • improvement
  • value and appreciate
  • crowd control
  • security measures
  • filter out
  • genuinely interested
  • sense of exclusivity
  • higher quality experience
  • barrier
  • limited financial means
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