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The bar chart shows the percentage of total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2003, and projections for 2050.

The bar chart shows the percentage of total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2003, and projections for 2050.
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The bar chart compares the proportion of total words of people in 4 cities (India,
China
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, the USA, and Japan) for different
three
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years
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 (1950,2003, and 2050)
Overall
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, we can see the
percentage
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 population in
China
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 highest in 1950 and 2002
while
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, in 2050 the
percentage
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 is decreased.
In contrast
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, between 1950 and 2002
China
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 increased throughout the whole time frame.
Furthermore
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, in 1950 the
percentage
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 in
China
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 arrived at above 20%
whereas
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 in 2002 arrived at 20%.
Although
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China
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 has the highest number in two
years
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 (1950,2002), in 2050 the
percentage
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 will drop to 10%.
On the other hand
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, in India, there was a dramatic increase in
three
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years
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. The proportion in
three
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years
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 is around 15% to under 20 %. On the opposite, in the USA and Japan, there was the lowest
percentage
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 from
China
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 and India. In the USA the highest
percentage
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 arrived in 1950 and reached over 5% but in 2002 and 2050 remained stable at 5%.
The
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Japan was
lowest
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the lowest
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 country in
three
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years
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 was decreased, the
percentage
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 arrived in
three
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years
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 under 5%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, three, years, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • percentage
  • total world population
  • countries
  • 1950
  • 2003
  • projections
  • 2050
  • comparison
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • stable
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