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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it a good idea, but some people oppose it. Dicuss in both views and give your opinion.

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Aeroplanes would be used to transport yield and
vegetables
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 to other
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 which in
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 plants difficultly grow up or out of date. Some
people
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 think it is a good idea,
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 some
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 deny it.
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 writer will write in both my views and my opinion. On the one hand, it is important to recognize that carrying perishable items
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 as produce and
vegetables
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 facilitates the
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which
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 couldn’t grow
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 kinds of plants, out of the situation of famine or shortage of very essential crops. One real case is that some nations in
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 area often lack instrumental foods, leading to inadequate nutrition, but thanks to planes, the non-profit government organisations in the world can aid regardless of the far distance that no other transportation means can adapt to
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 mission, excluding aircraft.
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 example indicates that shipping farming products by flight is a virtual bridge to connect throughout the world and not only boosts the agricultural industry but
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 prevents food supply crisis, especially in some
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lands
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 facing scarcity of victuals resources.
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, when you don't transport
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products
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 and
vegetables
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, you will help your bucolic stronger and residents will have state-of-the-art equipment and the latest version.
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, China keeps the good products for themself and sells bad products to
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 which are weaker than China. In conclusion, under no circumstances, should
people
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 underestimate the benefit of airline transportation for output and
vegetables
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. Not only does it help to prevent starvation but
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 makes a foundation for global economic development.
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, we shouldn’t ignore the relevant influences like increasing goods
price
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 or polluting the air environment which can not surpass the abovementioned advantages.

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Provide a more comprehensive analysis of the advantages and disadvantages of using aircraft for transporting fruits and vegetables.
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Expand your range of vocabulary to demonstrate a higher level of language proficiency.
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Use a wider range of grammatical structures and sentence types to showcase a more advanced level of English.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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