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The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main feat make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main feat make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the difference
in
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 a bookstore in 2000 and the present time.
Overall
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, the
fiction
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area
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 was the largest among all sections.
However
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, art, hobbies and cookery sections expanded to replace the large
area
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 of
fiction
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.
Cafe
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A cafe
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built
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was built
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along with
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 tables in the middle of the bookstore.
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Fiction
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The fiction
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area
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 was the largest section starting from the left side from the entrance to the end of the bookstore.
Nonetheless
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, the art, hobbies and cookery sections expanded and took
three
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a
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 quarter of
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fiction
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the fiction
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area
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in
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on
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 the left side of the entrance and left the
last
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 quarter for
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fiction
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the fiction
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area
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 next to
non-
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the non-fiction
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fiction
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 section. Next to the entrance the travel , new books and service desk remain the same.
Nevertheless
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,
cafe
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the cafe
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 was built in the same
area
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 that non-
fiction
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were
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 which makes the non-
fiction
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to be
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place
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 in the right corner
instead
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 of
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fiction
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the fiction
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area
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.
Additionally
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, three tables are available in front of the cafe.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fiction, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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