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The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main feat make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a bookstore in 2000 and now. summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main feat make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the difference
in
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between
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 a bookstore in 2000 and the present time.
Overall
, the
fiction
area
 was the largest among all sections.
However
, art, hobbies and cookery sections expanded to replace the large
area
 of
fiction
.
Cafe
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A cafe
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built
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was built
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along with
 tables in the middle of the bookstore.
Fiction
Correct article usage
The fiction
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area
 was the largest section starting from the left side from the entrance to the end of the bookstore.
Nonetheless
, the art, hobbies and cookery sections expanded and took
three
Correct determiner usage
a
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 quarter of
fiction
Correct article usage
the fiction
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area
in
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on
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 the left side of the entrance and left the
last
 quarter for
fiction
Correct article usage
the fiction
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area
 next to
non-
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the non-fiction
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fiction
 section. Next to the entrance the travel , new books and service desk remain the same.
Nevertheless
,
cafe
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the cafe
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 was built in the same
area
 that non-
fiction
were
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was
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 which makes the non-
fiction
to be
Verb problem
place
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 in the right corner
instead
 of
fiction
Correct article usage
the fiction
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area
.
Additionally
, three tables are available in front of the cafe.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fiction, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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