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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Your local council is planning to hold an election to choose members from the society but there are no young people on the council and you think that the council needs young people's views. You are thinking of standing for election. Write a letter to the head of the council. In your letter, state why you want to be elected mention why you think you would be a good candidate describe your qualities, skills, experience, interests, if any

#minutes #council #election #members #society #people #head #candidate #qualities #skills #interests
Dear Sir, I
am
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heared
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heard
hearing
about
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that you are planning to choose
a members
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members
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from
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 our
society
. I am writing
this
 letter to inform you I am a good
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candidate
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this
 position. I am
Lavneet
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Navneet
 Kumar, I am from Sham
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. I am
standig
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standing
 in
this
society
 election. Our
society
 in a lot of
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candidates
candidate
 for
this
 position, but I think now
the
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 time
change
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the
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 thinking. We will be going with the young
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candidate
 because
young
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the young
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condidate
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candidate
 is aware
the
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easily
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and easily
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to mold
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 him with
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. I did
the
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 lot of work for our
society
 and always
orgainized
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organised
the
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every function and
events
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. I am always ready to
the
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apply
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help
of
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people
on
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every
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any
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 time. I have
create
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 a good image in
this
society
. I have some
plan
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plans
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 for new
developement
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development
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Improving
 car parking,
new
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a new
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 garden and
play ground
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playground
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 for
badmiton
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badminton
. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours Sincerely,
Lavneet
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Navneet
 Kumar
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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