You have been working with your company for two years and are interested in a promotion. Write a letter to your direct boss. In your letter: Explain your varied achievements over the past two years Express your interest in growing with the company Ask for a meeting to discuss a potential promotion Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Mr. Phillips,

Dear Mr. Phillips, I am writing
this
letter to express my feelings towards your
company
.I have been working
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a lot of hard
work
for
this
firm.So,
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company
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success in the whole world.
To begin
with,all workers do the
work
with enthusiasm,So that,our
company
success touch to every corner of the nation.
Last
years
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,
i
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went to Canada for
business
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trip and
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our organization got first prize for
quality
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the quality
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of the product and I
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as
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Manager.Because
,
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did
work
with focus and completed my project before the deadline.I have been attending
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a meeting
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meeting
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with international
busineesman
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businessman
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and they always give positive
reponse
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responses
to us.I handled many big deals and
also
got profit from them.
Moreover
,I prefer to
work
with you.
Firstly
,I know that everything and strategies.Which
needS
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to grow your
company
.KPS
businees
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business
businesses
also
provide good salary and I get
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to visit other countries through
this
firm.That's why, I want to grow up myself in
this
company
.
Furthermore
,I want to ask
from
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you for
meeting
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.I think that you should
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the
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meeting
for
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discuss
about
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this
.If you agree
then
we will hold
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next week at 11am. I am looking forward
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your response. Thank you Yours sincerely, Gagandeep Kaur
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
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  • even though
  • despite

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