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The three pie chart illustrates extend granted at the National University for a period twenty years.

The three pie chart illustrates extend granted at the National University for a period twenty years.
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The three pie chart illustrates
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the extend
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extend
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 granted at the National University for a period
twenty
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 years. There is a clear number of graduates in computer science a rise every ten years compared to
Law
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 granted.
Although
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 those who graduated in Computer Science and
law
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 in 1990 were equal, the development of the two was
opposite
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.
According to
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 the results of the two thousandth year, the business and
law
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 are equaling to
medicine
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the medicine
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 of 30% and the sum of the three exceeded only just over a quarter.For twenty years, the lowest indicator was the
law
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 and it was a modest fifteen per cent. In 2010, computer science was almost half nearly the full
percent
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per cent
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 higher than the other three areas.
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Furthermore
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 the initial and final rate of medicine was just over a quarter.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words law with synonyms.
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