The given chart represents the number of tavellers using three vital airports in New York city among 1995 and 2000.

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The given chart illustrates the number of tourists using three major airports in New York City over the period from 1995 to 2000.

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,LaGuardia and Newark

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airport

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airports

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were gaining

visitors

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year

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year

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while

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John

F.Kennedy

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F. Kennedy

fluctuated wildly over the given period. In the beginning, LaGuardia was the most popular

airport

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with

passability

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a passability

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of approximately 35

million

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people per

year

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.In comparison, Newark

airport

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was the least popular in 1995 with

passability

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a passability

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of almost 15

million

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people per

year

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This

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These

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two

airports

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airports'

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stats stayed the same in 2000.

However

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airport

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visitors

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of LaGuardia doubled and hit nearly 70

million

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people per

year

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in 2000, whilst Newark

airport

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was slightly under 45

million

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visitors

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per

year

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. John

F.Kennedy

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F. Kennedy

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airport

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Airport

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oscillated.There was a sharp rise between 1996 and 1997,in 1997 there

was

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were

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million

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visitors

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however

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,in 1998 there was a wild fall.

Nonetheless

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,in 2000, John

F.Kennedy

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F. Kennedy

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airport

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Airport

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ended up being the second most popular

airport

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among

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this

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these

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three.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words airport, visitors, year, million with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.

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5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

153 words

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