In many countries, fast food is becoming cheaper and more widely available. ‎Do the disadvantages of this outweigh the advantages?‎

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era, fast

food

is becoming more and more popular,

besides

, it is becoming less expensive than in the past. that's why more

pepole

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people

prefer to buy

this

type of available

food

instead

of preparing meals which may demand a lot

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effort and

time

. I think that the drawbacks of the former type of

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much less

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the advantages and one should not abuse it. Recently, many of us

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realy

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really

hard and for a long

time

during the day so that we don't even have

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time

to think about our meals, and when we are starving

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the middle of the day, the

most easy

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thing to do is to order a

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meal.

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realy

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really

dosen't

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cost a lot of money and is not

time consuming

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. But we should always remember that it is much less healthy than

food

that we invest in and cook by

ouselves

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ourselves

and to be honest, it

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also costs

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also

costs less than the one that we buy.

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, if you decide to cook by yourself, you will pay attention to the

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nutrition

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that your meal includes, to the way you prepare it and sometimes to how it looks, and try to

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emphasise

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be totally nutritional balanced.

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, one may abuse fast

food

because you can get it really rapidly and you can choose between the different

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available

cuisines, and it is

realy

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really

delicious. So why not

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do that?

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the health issue, I think that preparing meals is very important socially.

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, when the

mothers

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returns from work, it would be enjoyable to make

food

with her children,

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the end, all family members

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in the dining room and eat together thing

that

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would make them feel much

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and beloved.

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in spite

of the fact that dining with

fast-

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fast food

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food

may be the

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easy

way to

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, I think

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it has a lot of disadvantages that may

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negatively our daily

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