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The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph and chart below give information on the average daily maximum and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The line graph and bar chart show the typical highest and lowest
temperatures
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 per day over a
month
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 period
as well as
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 the mean of
days
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 on each
month
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 having
rainfall
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 in
Brisbane
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 and
Canberra
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.
Overall
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,
Brisbane
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 is hotter during the
year
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 than
Canberra
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 with more intensity of
rainfall
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 between the end of the
year
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 and the following mid-
year
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. In terms of maximum
temperatures
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,
Brisbane
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 and
Canberra
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 have about equal numbers at around 27.5
degrees
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 Celcius at the beginning of the
year
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.
In contrast
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, the minimum
temperature
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 of
Brisbane
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 in January stood at just above 20
degrees
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 Celcius compared to
Canberra
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 with a lower
temperature
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 of approximately 12.5
degrees
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. In February,
Brisbane
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's
temperature
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 reached a peak of 30
degrees
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,
while
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 the
temperature
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 in
Canberra
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 levelled off at the same point as the previous
month
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.
Consequently
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, both cities face a gradual decline in their
temperatures
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 to approximately 22.5
degrees
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 Celcius
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the highest
temperatures
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 in
Brisbane
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 and almost zero in
Canberra
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 during July.
Finally
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, the
temperature
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 of
Canberra
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 and
Brisbane
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 bounces back to a level
that is
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 nearly equal to the start point.
On the other hand
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, the daily
rainfall
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 in
Brisbane
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 per 4-week period is higher than in
Canberra
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 from November until May of the next
year
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 with a tip of 14
days
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 monthly in February and March.
In addition
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,
Canberra
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's
rainfall
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 is more likely to occur in mid-
year
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 with a slighter number of
days
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 at 10. The lowest
rainfall
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days
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 in a
month
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 for both municipalities lie at 7
days
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words temperatures, month, days, rainfall, brisbane, canberra, year, degrees, temperature with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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