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The charts show the info about the use of Internet in five countries in Europe in 2000.

The charts show the info about the use of Internet in five countries in Europe in 2000.
#show #info #internet #five #countries #europe
The bar chart above illustrates the proportion of using
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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while
 the pie chart shows the average amount spent on online shopping per person in five countries in Europe in 2000.
Overall
,
sweden
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Sweden
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 had its most individuals using the
internet
,
on the
contrary
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 the least of all
is
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in
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Spain
. The country that had the most amount of money spent on online shopping per person is
UK
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the UK
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while
Spain
 spent the smallest amount. Only 5% of
Spain
's citizens
using
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use
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internet
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the internet
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 and 10% of France's people surfing on the
internet
.
Furthermore
, Sweden citizens
were went
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 online at 35%, the highest among all.
In addition
, there are the United Kingdom and Germany who share slightly the same number at 20% and 15%. Individuals in the United Kingdom
paid
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average
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an average
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87
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euro
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euros
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on purchasing
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to purchase
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 things online.
Likewise
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Likewise,
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 Sweden, had their expense
allocate
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allocated
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 for electronic marketplace at about 76
euro
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euros
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,
while
 the French people gave out around 57
euro
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euros
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.
Moreover
,
Germany
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German
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 residents
buying
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buy
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 things on the
internet
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Internet
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 for 46
euro
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euros
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 whilst
Spain
 only
gave
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gives
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 out
at
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an
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 average
10
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of 10
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euro
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euros
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 per person.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, spain, euro with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gave" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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