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The diagram below show some principles of house design for cool and for warm climates.

The diagram below show some principles of house design for cool and for warm climates.
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The diagram displays concepts of housing designs in tropical and temperate
weathers
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weather
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 in the temperate climate, the building materials, roofing and window designs are equipped for insulation and storage of
heat
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while
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 during the day in the warmer climate, the opposite is true . As for
night time
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nighttime
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 in tropical
climates
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,
windows
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window
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 design is essential. Buildings in
the
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apply
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cool
climates
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 are designed with
high angled
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high-angled
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 roofing to conserve
heat
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 but those in
the
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warm
climates
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 are left overhanging as shade during the day to obstruct sunlight and made from reflective material to bounce off every
heat
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 that strikes. As it concerns the windows, during the day in a hot atmosphere,it is closed but left open at night .
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However
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 the windows in the cooler weather conditions are in the plane of
angle
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the angle
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 of reflection of sunlight . The materials used for the structural designs are
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heat trapping
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heat-trapping
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 and insulating as in winter,houses in the Northern
hemisphere
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Hemisphere
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 require
this
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, as for the homes in warmer
climates
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, the construction materials provide external insulation and reflection.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words heat, climates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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