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Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree ? ( In the future, it seems more difficult to live on the Earth. Some people think more money should be spent on other planets to live on, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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scientist to explore new things and improve their
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environment
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modern
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 to try hard and make technology more and more popular so that
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people
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life
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space research
  • living standards
  • colonization
  • telecommunications
  • weather forecasting
  • global threats
  • climate change
  • astronomical events
  • financial resources
  • sustainability
  • renewable energy
  • resource distribution
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