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Band 5

Million of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth.

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The majority of
community
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 accuse their bad living situation
is
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because a huge range of
money
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are
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 spent on exploring
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a new
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 place in
the
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space
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 and they believe
this
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money
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 should pay for developing life standard.
This
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 essay will disagree with
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 statement and explain the reason for its view. Searching
something
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 new in the
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 will save our lives. In
the
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reality, many problems
that
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have been endangered people like pollution or natural diseases so we should have a new place that up to standard for us if the Earth disappears.
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, scientists have tried to find
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other plants that have oxygen, water or nitrogen at enough rates like Earth to emigrate people to these and avoid the extinction of
human
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.
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, many individuals think their
money
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of
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the
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state taxes are
wastes
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waste
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 for yet unnecessary things and
make
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makes
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 their lives worse and worse. Exploring
also
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 is not a valid method
due to
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 our lack of knowledge about anything that
out
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 of our planet so pay for exploring
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 like we wasting
moneys
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money
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. But it is not a pretty reason
for
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to
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 make their needy situation up and a cause why I disagree with their emotions is because they
just
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are just
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 lazy
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then
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they accuse
it
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to
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the authority. To be honest, despite researching
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 is not really a valid way to spend
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 and time
on
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but we should do it
due to
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 our appearances.
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 that, when we know all about
this
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 world or
this
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space
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, we can manage or control and avoid any negative situation that can weaken
human
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humans
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. An example can be seen most clearly
that
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is
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natural diseases will kill a huge amount of people since we have a
space
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 machine to forecast the weather.
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, exploring
the
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space
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 plays an essential role in our appearance.
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, the writer absolutely agrees with the most valid opinion that millions of dollars are
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 for searching is necessary.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • technological advancements
  • scientific discoveries
  • astronomy
  • satellites
  • international collaboration
  • economic benefits
  • living standards
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • healthcare
  • poverty reduction
  • distribute funds
  • resource allocation
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