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People who live in large cities face a range of problems in their daily life. What are the main problems people in cities face, and how can these problems be tackled?

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The urban cities, where
people
 are likely to live, have to solve several problems of their normal life.
This
 problem is attributable to the cost of living and transportation but can be addressed by controlling the money we pay for our daily
life
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lives
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. The root of the problem comes from
people
's needs and they pay a cost for their needs much higher than the salary they receive each month. In spite of the low salary,
people
still
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 required to live in a big modern house. Because of
wanting
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want
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 to improve
quality
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their quality
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 of
living
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life
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, they don't mind their health and start to get stressed.Remaining from that bad habit for a long time, your health will get into trouble and have some cardiovascular disease that you can not
continuing
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continue
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 your work, you will
get
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 bankrupt soon. Another factor may be the transportation that we usually use to work, school or wherever we like.
In other words
,
people
 want to remove their old-fashioned transport to buy a new one more modern.
As a result
, we pay numerous of money to buy extravagant transport which services our date with friends and pridely say to them that I had bought of exorbitant car that you had to dream about until dead cannot buy . A solution to these problems is to control the expenditure that we pay every month, So that we easily become a hass and get a smart plan for paying.
This
 situation leads to having a smart lifestyle and getting a life without stress.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • metropolis
  • commute
  • public transportation
  • gridlock
  • air pollution
  • noise pollution
  • expensive housing
  • exorbitant prices
  • work-life balance
  • recreation areas
  • parks and gardens
  • criminal activities
  • security measures
  • density
  • neighborhood
  • public amenities
  • healthcare facilities
  • educational institutions
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