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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it a good idea, but some people oppose it. Dicuss in both views and give your opinion.

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There is an argument that they should
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 airliners to transit
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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although
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 they are hard to grow
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 others have the opposite opinion.
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 topic will be discussed in both views. The main reason that people think they should
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aircraft
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 to
transport
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fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 is its convince. It's true because if they
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aircraft
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, the distances will be shorter so that
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 are kept fresh more. What's more, using
aircraft
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 can bring more
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 because it is big. Take America as an example,
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 is a big and developed country so they always
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aircraft
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 them to earn more profit.
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, others think that they shouldn't
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aircraft
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 because it wastes a lot of money and Fossil fuel. It is true because if they want to
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 by plane, they will spend a lot of money buying or making the plane and it
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 uses more fuel than other transports. What is more, some people think that in
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 there is a bad environment for
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 to grow because of air and degree
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 they can grow a variety of plants in trucks or ships. In conclusion, using
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 to deliver
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 have a lot of benefits and negative effect
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 as money, fossil fuel and so on but it is most dependent on distance. I feel that we should
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aircraft
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 to
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fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 more because it is faster and we can enjoy more
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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